RUT KO CHEH'RAY PE MUL K DEKHTAY HAIN.....

[k-kheyal]

SLAM O ALIKUM.....P.C. K TMAM DOSTON KI NUZR.....AIK AUR GHAZAL...


-KHEYAL

[Zehrab]

Wah Kheyal Saheb

Hasb-e mamool apney khas andaz ki
mashoor ker deney wali ghzal

Rut ko chehrey pe mal ke dekhtey hain
aao gher sey nikal ke dekhtey hain

kya khoobsoorat matl'a hay...anokhi terkeeb...bohat khoob

aur ye sher tow bohat gehraai liye huey hay:

ge rhay jur'at tow tajruba ker len
apni had sey nikal ker dekhtey hain

Bohat kuch likhna chah raha tha lekin
masroofiat moqa naheen dey raheen

Ek bey had dil kash aur khayal angez ghazal
ke liye ...dheron daad

Kher Andesh

Qamar

[kute muskaan]

Kheyal sb.. ye ghazal to copy lagti hay FARAZ ki ghazal .. suna hay log aankh bher k osay dekhtay hain...

[kute muskaan]

im sure ye ghazal apne AHMAD FARAZ ki ghazal SUNA HAY LOG AANKH BHER K OSAY DEKHTAY HAIN...

ISI ZAMEEN PER LIKHI HAY....

[kute muskaan]

BERHAAL...ACHI KOSHISH HAY...

[unknown destination]

Fifth couplet is very thoughtful . I enjoyed reading it overall.

[Abdus Samad Shaikh]

As salamu alaikum
Wah wah ji kiya kehnay...
bahot hi mast mast aik khubsurat ghazal pesh ki hy aap ne...
her shayr apni hagah per saja ke rakha hy aap ne

Dhair sari daad qabul kijye..
khush rahain

[k-kheyal]

Wah Kheyal Saheb

Hasb-e mamool apney khas andaz ki
mashoor ker deney wali ghzal

Rut ko chehrey pe mal ke dekhtey hain
aao gher sey nikal ke dekhtey hain

kya khoobsoorat matl'a hay...anokhi terkeeb...bohat khoob

aur ye sher tow bohat gehraai liye huey hay:

ge rhay jur'at tow tajruba ker len
apni had sey nikal ker dekhtey hain

Bohat kuch likhna chah raha tha lekin
masroofiat moqa naheen dey raheen

Ek bey had dil kash aur khayal angez ghazal
ke liye ...dheron daad

Kher Andesh

Qamar

Qamar saheb....q shirminda kertay hain.....yeh aap jaisay khubsuret dil k log hain.....jo rung-o-boo talash ker letay hain.....
werna zird putton ki trf kon tawjjoh deta hai.....fi zamana....log wuqt se bundhay hain....her shukhs hi rwa rwi men hai....
acha lga....aap ki hazree is mehfil men....kuch wuqt yahan k liye bhi nikala krain....
aur aap ki taza ghazal kub tuk yahan pesh ho rahi hai....
bohot sara shukriya.....aap ki mahabbaton k liye...
shad baad rahain...

[k-kheyal]

As salamu alaikum
Wah wah ji kiya kehnay...
bahot hi mast mast aik khubsurat ghazal pesh ki hy aap ne...
her shayr apni hagah per saja ke rakha hy aap ne

Dhair sari daad qabul kijye..
khush rahain

bohot shukriya.....Sheikh ji....
aap ki aamed se maikhanay ki faza hi bdul jaya kerti hai.....
paimanay aur sboo.......ksi aur dunya men mehsoos kertay hain....khud ko.
lutf aya aap k jawab se.....
slamet rahain...

[kiran_habib]

Chotee behar pay achhi gazal hai faraz ki ghazal se hi zameen uthae hai